THIS IS WHAT IM TALKING ABOUT
You now have the melody in the song
And the beat at the beginning really
Catches my attention

I really hope to see more of this style in the future

Maybe put a low pass on the bass
Also make the song longer If you can

HAHA FINALLY
I found someone who has a chance at beating me
in the contest

You my friend are a major threat to pretty much everyone in the contest

you make want to try
Great job on this song too
I hope you can make it to the final round

Bass wise amazing job

But the last 1 minute 50 seconds was the part that grasped my attention
Don't get me wrong you did good
But the melody really kicked in at the last 40 seconds
The ending sounds like a beginning to me that I would make
Grasp the persons attention at the start
Then you're able to keep that persons attention
Like I said that last 1m 50s was really the only thing that got my attention
And I stayed even though you have the beat calm down

Start off with a catchy beat followed by a great melody
And that's how you're able to get more people to look at your music
Hey that's how I do things